Just started reading today, feels like MASH mixed with Top Gun in a good way, and you're much better at writing multiple characters into one dialogue than I have ever managed to lol. My characters end up sounding too similar and it gets difficult to keep track of who is saying what sometimes, but I never got that feeling reading this. I also like the level of detail in gear/procedure. It's just enough so people can get a clear picture but it's not so bogged down in details that it gets long-winded. A hard balance to achieve for sure!
Great stuff, can't wait to see more.
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