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Old 12-26-2021, 03:40 PM
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Generally I like them although the Myrmidon entry is a bit confusing in regard to them hunting parasites of the Quakers. I think if the sentence were arranged like this it would be less confusing: -
... linked in some way to the titanic creatures beyond hunting their parasites (to feast on by regurgitating their stomach onto a subdued creature).

Or perhaps: -
... linked in some way to the titanic creatures beyond hunting their parasites (the Myrmidons feast on these parasites by regurgitating their stomach onto a subdued creature).

Kharybdis and Hydra makes me think of the Greek legends of mighty heroes/heroines fighting powerful monsters. I don't know if that was your intent but it definitely works in context of your game world - the members of the Project going out to slay the beasts that threaten the world!
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