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9th Infantry Division (Motorized)
Here is an early draft of another project - the US 9th Division. Please feel free to nitpick.
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I realize this will feel incredibly wrong to people used to the Queen's English, but the US Army would not have an Armoured Gun System (I'll give a pass to the discussion of an anti-armour platoon, but since the program name is a proper name, it should be Armored Gun System).
"There were significant opponents of the motorised concept however on both sides, some arguing for an increase in heavy forces as the 9th was to light to fight armour" - should be too "The division kicked it’s heels and trained hard until January 1997" - should be its (no apostrophe) "The FAVs were less of a success. These were the Chenowith dune buggies" - Chenowth, not Chenowith "In 1995 with the outbreak of the Sin-Soviet War" - Sino-Soviet, although Sin-Soviet makes me chuckle
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I only had time to look over a little bit.
one thing to look at was your short ranged Artillery. how about towed old pack 75s most bases have 4 to 7 as salute guns. the hummer could tow one of them with a four or five creates of ammo. or trailer mounted 107mm rockers (china's supplied or traded make it up) or trailer mounted 70mm rockets. take pods from AH-1/64 or uh-60s they are mostly 19 round pods but groups of 7 round pods could be used. weld them to a trailer old school and put a battery to them..and step back. |
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I am adding a note about the pods though. |
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Look good so far, keep it up
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Well, it's been a day when I have done lots of train travel so here is a fuller, illustrated version.
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thanks for the call out.. that was cool. |
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On figure 7's caption: "Note the stored kit strapped onto ever available surface" - should be every Page 8: "The original vehicle was known as “The Thingi11”" - there's an extra character in the superscript.
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Nice. The art adds an interesting flavor.
A few nits, mostly on page 2. 1st para, 1st sentence: "The 9th structure" should be "9th's" 2nd para, only 1 r in Sheridan 3rd para, should be "ground-mounted automatic..." 4th & 5th paragraphs could be merged, and the sentences restructured. I'd split the last sentence of the 4th, since you're talking about both the division and a brigade at the same time. Add in that the division was alerted for the 1990-91 Gulf War, to add some chronology. The following paragraphs with the 81st Brigade seem to jump about a bit. Where did the 199th Light Brigade go, and was it still motorized when it was deployed? Perhaps add something to its description. Sorry if I seem pedantic, I used to be an editor.
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Good, 'cause I kept thinking about this. I seem to have formed habits by reading over my sons' school papers. Both are in high school this year, and one is in AP English.
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This paragraph kind of contradicts itself, if the division was prepared for Europe, but its primary mission was to the Pacific. Were the 3 separated battalions not motorized, or were they de-motorized when they were detached? If they hadn't yet been motorized, maybe that could be mentioned on the previous page; if motorization was a work in progress. What units replaced them, new creations or transfers from somewhere else? What's the irony, I could infer that the 199th went over the Pacific, is that what happened? Were the deployment orders and detachment of the 199th simultaneous? Further on, the 3 battalions mentioned above aren't in the 1995 OOB on page 10, before their detachment. Aside: FWIW, I'd long thought that the 9th was one of the divisions experimentally motorized before deployment to Europe in WW2, but Wikipedia tells me I'm wrong. One of its brigades was more or less amphibious in Vietnam, though, I got that right.
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James,
Great work, just throwing out an idea though. Instead of having an Iranian Army Bde attached maybe something like KATUSAs ? I was looking at pics of the current Iraqi and Kurdish forces in combat against ISIS and the idea dawned on me. Some of them looked very "Americanized". |
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Please don't feel that I'm jumping on you or this particular piece.
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Idon't in fact I appreciate it - it improves the articles
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